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hey tell me what you think

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6:55 pm
June 30, 2009


The FT wrangler

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Hey guys tell me what you think of this short I'm starting. let me know and give what ever feed back you can.

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In a dark room he sat, waiting for his mark to enter. He came in threw the window earlier that night after the target had left. The reasons why he was here, he didn’t know and didn’t need to. All the assassin knew was that the man in this room was his target.

 

Midnight came and Frank Lancaster just came from a drunken night in the local brothel. He stumbled his way back to the room he had gotten at the local trash hole that passed for an inn. Frank opened the door, it was pitch black. He closed the door behind him and began to undress. Then Frank heard “Ahem”. He went stiff with panic.

Hello how was your night?” the voice continued in a very gentle pleasant tone.

Good…” Frank choked.

The voice said nothing for a long period of time.

Who are you?” Frank said with terror in his voice.

My name or profession” the voice said

Frank said nothing

My name is Marcus Creed and you know why I’m here” he said

But I did nothing to her I swear it” Frank spoke with determination.

I don’t care, that’s not my business what happened, and my business is you.” Marcus said calmly.

You won’t get away with this, I have powerful friends!” Frank got louder.

Calm down there’s no need to raise your voice, yes I will and I know you have powerful friends, that’s why I’m here.” Marcus calmer now.

 

Frank shot for the door, Marcus was already there blade in hand. He didn’t even feel the knife enter his side or the elbow in his throat. Marcus bent low and lacerates the drunkard Franks throat. And with a word “Goodnight” Marcus was gone and out the window.

 

A swift death to all!!!! Because I have beer waiting.

6:43 am
July 2, 2009


BigE

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posts 891

Sounds good, Frank is screwed! 

Hacking My Way to Glory and Riches

2:06 pm
July 2, 2009


The FT wrangler

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posts 152

theres more im adding im trying to make it sound right its for my storyboarding class and it gonna be quit long.

A swift death to all!!!! Because I have beer waiting.



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